Annihilated

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Forged in places he strives to remain,

her scent drives the breath from his lungs.

With imposing strength,

taking all he possesses,

she turns rationality on end.

Her annihilation lies under his hand,

her hair, her bones, her skin,

turned to dust.

In vain he erases her essence forever —

scorched

electrified

  and so blown away.

 ~

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33 thoughts on “Annihilated

  1. The power of a woman. Wonderful poem.

  2. Kelly, you know how to heat up my blood through your descriptive powers! Now, hopefully will fuel my dreams. . .

    • I’m just glad to know you feel anything with my writing, Robin. Thank you!
      And I wish you all the best with those dreams of yours… hope you’re having a good week. xo

      • Hi Kelly, thanks for wishes for a good week! I hope you have had some great moments with the family and rest much needed in your profession. Hugs, Robin

  3. now, that’s power –

  4. Whose life are you turning upside down? If I had to guess, I’d say that a man would appreciate such an upending might. But why would he erase it? That I don’t get.

    • Is it the blogging format that makes you think I’m associated with this? I find it curious that I try to keep a writing blog as opposed to a personal one, but am sometimes brought into the writing personally… seems like in books people aren’t as apt to do that… the difference must be in the personal connection made available through the comments.
      And he can’t erase her, Trent!

      • Whether in vain or not, he’s still trying… why would he?

        I’m not sure how to answer your earlier question. This isn’t fiction, right? But if it’s not personal, what is it? It feels personal. I think your average novel blatantly constructs external characters and plots, so it’s easy to immerse in that. You’re creating more of a stream of thought, and I guess it’s somewhat natural to think of it that way. Maybe it’s a testament to your abilities that you personalize things like this.

      • I don’t know why he’s trying – didn’t write that part! And you’re right, it is more like a stream, which I enjoy.
        You always say how your writing takes its own path and that’s what happens with me as well. And then I just add feeling and provocation here and there to give it life.
        I will let you know why this guy is trying to leave her when he tells me sometime in the future, okay?! lol

    • Seems I have the same problem as Trent. Must be the male brain.

  5. Wow, such powerful words! Really good! Diane

  6. “Her annihilation lies under his hand…”—Nice!

  7. Some really interesting lines here, Kelly. Simple and complex, like many relationships.

  8. Love the poem, Kelly, and the comments are so interesting. Trying to rationalize and make sense of what isn’t rational but “of the essence,” beyond emotion as well. Makes me think of the eternal dance of creation and destruction… the ultimate lack of control 😀
    Wow, you got my mind going here.

    • Well I guess that’s a good thing!
      And yes, the fact that emotions can leave us powerless is at the heart of this piece. There can be real intensity in those moments, which I tried to capture. 🙂
      Thanks so much, Diana!

  9. Incredible!
    I started blogging this month, and it is a pleasure that I came across your blog.
    It has inspired me to start my third article.
    Thank you:)

  10. The power of emotion. You captured that well, Kelly. It’s a complex relationship that they have, perhaps a power struggle. Well done, Kelly. xox

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